New Title: Vaulting the Sea --> To Dive Together or to Love One Another

 In the story Vaulting the Sea, the main character, Taoyu, is faced with a lasting struggle throughout the story. He has to decide whether or not to tell Hai about his feelings towards him, and ruin their diving relationship and probably synchronicity, as well as his own career. At the end of the story, Taoyu decides not to jump, and jeopardizes his own career in hopes of being able to be who he truly wants to be, thus my new reimagined title, To Dive Together or to Love One Another.

While Taoyu does not end up with Hai, I still feel the "to Love" part of the title does lead a person who hasn't read it yet to wonder if they do, and by the end of the story they will know that he chose not to dive at all, and Taoyu does not get his happily ever after, in fact going into some sort of hiding.

The whole story revolving around synchronized diving also struck me when creating a new title, and that is where the together part comes, as this is such a 2-person affair, as if one person is off, the whole dive is off. And since Hai does not share the same feelings towards Taoyu as he does for Hai, Hai is off, and they are out of sync.

I think the Vaulting the Sea title is pretty good as it is already, but it leaves a lot, maybe even too much to the imagination, especially if you don't know what the story is about. I feel that if you don't necessarily specify but hint, like in my title, it might draw more people in, but Vaulting the Sea does leave more to the imagination, and is a perfectly good title as is.

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